Strangers in the Night
I know it sounds like a cliché. Two strangers in the night. Chance encounter. His eyes met mine. We have all heard them before. He was worldly in a way that I had never experienced. I nervously shuffled my feet. The glass reflection in the puddle held my gaze. Listening to the gypsy melody he strummed on his guitar and the smooth tone of his voice I knew he must have been singing it just to me. Shivers went up my spine and I slowly lifted my eyes and was drawn like a moth into his deep dark stare. Frozen from the intensity of his gaze I knew this was the moment that I had always been waiting for. My eyes traveled down towards his pouty, slightly damp lips. My body tensed with expectation and then I heard, “do you have any spare change?”
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Strangers in the Night
Endlessly
Solitude
Blop, a ripple across the lake
A golden fish bobs up for another take
Peaceful by the shaded shore
Reminds me of an old folklore
Time passes slow as the ripples spread
Mesmerizing me with memories in my head
A golden fish bobs up for another take
Peaceful by the shaded shore
Reminds me of an old folklore
Time passes slow as the ripples spread
Mesmerizing me with memories in my head
Life
Life is cruel, life is kind
nature helps to sooth my mind
The fish swirl to their secret dance
insects buzz with out a glance
Time passes slowly like a ripple
rivers slowly change with just a trickle
You never know what is down the road
you have to live you life and be bold
3 comments:
I like it! There's one sentence error. You have a double was in the following sentence: Shivers went up my spine and I slowly lifted my eyes and was was drawn like a moth into his deep dark stare.
Keep up the good work!
Tracy
Thanks for the feedback. I am kinda surprised I wrote it myself.
I like the effect of the short choppy phrases in the beginning. It gives the reader a sense of breathlessness like you are so breathless as you tell this story. There are so many descriptions I love like drawn like a moth into his deep dark stare, frozen from the intensity of his gaze, and my all time favorite pouty, slightly damp lips! I adore truly surprise endings. I was not expecting this ending which made me say Wow! at the end.
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